A guy comes home to find his relative and her friend drinking in his apartment, trying to cheer up the friend after she got dumped by her boyfriend. Wanting to find out why she was dumped, she turns to the guy to see if he can tell if there's anything wrong with her.
Update: Fixed typo. Links are updated, but if you got the first version, you can just grab the changed page below.
DF | RG | EX | FU | typo
Thanks for the release. Do you go back and fix any spelling mistakes if you notice any? I ask because I noticed a couple on one of the pages and figured I'd point them out to you if you're interested.
ReplyDeleteGo ahead.
ReplyDeleteOk cool. It wasn't anything major. They were both on page 12. The 1st would be I guess 2nd Speech Bubble of the page. It reads, "For you too, Eri-chan!? It is better than your old boyfriend!?" It's not really a spelling error, but I think "it" and "is" should be switched so that it reads, "Is it better than your old boyfriend!?"
ReplyDeleteThe other thing I noticed was in the (I believe) 4th Speech Bubble. It reads, "Give it do...Mitsuki too!" It should be "to" instead of "do".
That was it.
I think they both work, at least in a colloquial situation. "The sex is better?" or "Is the sex better?" Isn't it just a matter of emphasizing the noun or the verb?
ReplyDeleteThe second on is obviously a typo, so thanks for pointing that out. I'll change that.
True. I guess it's just a matter of preference. The way I phrased it just sounds better to me so that's why I mentioned it.
ReplyDeleteOh and no problem regarding the typo. It's nice to see someone is at least receptive to fans pointing out mistakes if they notice any. I pointed out a mistake to a group where they left out an entire page and they acted as if they hadn't made any mistakes.
ReplyDeleteSome people are just stupid and take anything as an insult. As long as you're civil and constructive when giving critique, I'm happy to hear it.
ReplyDeleteYeah I don't want to come off as all high and mighty with an attitude of, "Hey you should listen to me because I'm never wrong!" I understand how much time and effort goes into the work you and others do (I've pondered getting into editing myself and can tell right from the start how much work it takes). I just want to help out any way I can to make it as perfect as possible.
ReplyDeleteGets to fuck his cousin and her friend and were both hot as hell??? LUCKY!!!! Thank you YQII for the TL and Art for the QC.
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome. Many thanx Yqii.
ReplyDeleteWell, ..... THAT was IN-teresting.
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